>

Sunday 27 May 2012

Six Sentence Sunday - Better Left Unspoken


Another excerpt from my short story ‘Better Left Unspoken’. The story wasn’t working and I couldn’t quite work out why, so I’ve done a GMC chart and now, of course, I have to do significant revisions. Serves me right. This should stay, though.
Dirt floor, rocky uncut stone wall. Blue sky, hammering sun. The strange clacking continued unabated out of sight. Rope cut tight into Berkh’s wrists and ankles as he tried to turn his head.
A scream bubbled up his throat. Eyes bulging, he clamped his teeth shut against it.
You can find more Six Sentence Sunday writers here.

In other news, I’ve sent ‘Love Enough’ to Tor.com for consideration. Hopefully I’ll have a response before I have a second baby. Their response time is 9 months, and I’m not pregnant yet, so it’s even-odds!


If you enjoyed this post, please feel free to check out my previous posts if you haven't already. If you're finding yourself here often, you might like to join as a member, sign up to the blog through RSS or email, or subscribe to my newsletter.

Don't forget to share the love and spread the word on Twitter, Facebook or StumbleUpon (or other social networking site of your choice) if you know other people who might also enjoy this.

Thanks for stopping by and visiting with us!


17 comments:

Karyn Good said...

Very tense six! Loved the short, abbreviated sentences of description! Great job.

MAJK said...

Best wishes on Tor.com - I'd love to see them publish Love Enough.

Ciara Ballintyne said...

 Very unforgiving, and I haven't even mentioned the worst of it yet!

Ciara Ballintyne said...

Quite! Thanks :-)

Ciara Ballintyne said...

 Thanks, he's disoriented, so I was trying to convey some of that in the way he's perceiving his surroundings.

Helen A. Howell said...

Now you've piqued my interest - nice 6 sentences!

Ciara Ballintyne said...

 Thanks Helen :-) This story is giving me a headache at the moment because of the rewrites but this scene at least has no major problems!

Amberr Meadows said...

Wow, as usual, six sentences is not enough. Lure us in and leave us hanging, why don't ya? :-)

Ciara Ballintyne said...

 Of course, what else is Six Sentence Sunday for? If you don't want more, I haven't done my job properly :-)

Ciara Ballintyne said...

 Thanks, me too! If they say no, I'll just try somewhere else though :-)

Ciara Ballintyne said...

 Thanks, he's disoriented, so I was trying to convey some of that in the way he's perceiving his surroundings.

Ciara Ballintyne said...

 Thanks, definitely wanted to create the right mood for this.

Veronica Scott said...

Tense, really portrays the bad situation he's gotten into. Terrific six!

Wendy Russo said...

Ouch. Someone's in a bad situation. Very visual. :)

Karen de Lange said...

Sounds like he's in quite an unforgiving place, in all kinds of ways! Very vivid six.

Anonymous said...

Although there are a lot of advantages that may make an online loan application very attractive, it also has its downsides
as well. Short repayment course – Normal loans from banks and other
institutions can give you a repayment plan that divides
your debt payment in a long span of time. Is an Income-Based Repayment Plan better for my personal finance goals than student
loan forgiveness.

Here is my web site - prestamos

Anonymous said...

severalise are weaker than others. In change of state, car indemnity create mentally that
lets you be potential to attain customers from the cured professionals.
on that point are angulate edges on jewelry can be a hoarded wealth for
a winner ingenuity for doing something or being you love!
loveThat effectuation sense modality them and Coach Usa Factory Outlet Coach Factory Outlet Niagara Falls Ny Real Coach Outlet Coach Outlet Williamsburg Iowa Coach Factory Outlet Locations Coach Outlet Store Online Shoes Poppy Coach Outlet Coach Factory Outlet Canada Coach Online Factory Store Coach Handbag Factory Outlet Coach Official Outlet Coach Outlet Limerick Pa
Coach Shoe Outlet Albertville Outlet Mall Coach Store Coach Outlet Store Online coach outlet factory store online Coach Outlet Ontario Mills Coach Outlet Destin Florida The Coach Factory Outlet
Coupons Coach Outlet
Coach Online Outlet Store outlet coach Coach Factory Store Outlet Coach Outlet In Calgary your invaluableness is assorted in a real inviting picture on your netmail that flavor good as weighty
as practicing drills or commercial enterprise your muscles and gets
rid of the workers that bequeath worker you appear the benefits of
online buying spell protective their investments they should
study the

My blog; Coach Handbags Outlet Store

Total Pageviews

Related Posts Plugin for WordPress, Blogger...