From
Deathhawk's Betrayal:
Aldenon's compelling blue eyes trapped Astarl. Something about their intensity made her want to confess. They stripped her naked, in a way far more intimate than a mere lack of clothes, as if he shone a light into every dark corner of her soul. There were things in those corners she didn’t want him to see. There were things in those corners she didn’t want to see. Things no one should see.
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24 comments:
I've always wondered what six sentence Sunday consisted of and I love the practice, and your writing.
Love this - "far more intimate than a mere lack of clothes."
Great six,
*whistle* that't really powerful. great job!
Fantastic snippet - great image to accompany it, too. :)
Fantastically intense, making her want to confess, I love it.
Very intense. Great six.
ooh, great 6! loved the cadence and the tension
you pulled me in when you showed me how she's feeling
great 6
I love Six Sentence Sunday. It's an opportunity to share parts of my work. I don't have enough short stories that I can justify posting one here when I could be sending them off to magazines and anthologies, much as I would like to.
Thanks, I'm glad that made the point I was trying to convey.
Thank you, glad you liked it :-) This is a key point for Astarl.
I must admit to being partial to the imagery, but I'm biased. Thanks!
Thanks! Her feelings are something she battles a lot.
Thank you :-)
The cadence probably has some funny Greek name. Or maybe not. I'm studying rhetorical devices at the moment and I'm so confused LOL
That's good, cause it's important for readers to understand how she feels - and how it motivates her to act the way she does!
I know, I've tried to learn them too, but the names make it so hard to imbibe
I know what you mean. I'm at the point where I can recognise that soemthing probably is one, but I couldn't tell you what it's called or why LOL
There's a vulnerable moment for you. Great description. Really draws the reader in.
Thanks! It's always a bit dicey, getting reader sympathy for an assassin. Hard sell...
Oh, this is a very intense six! Now I want to KNOW what she's hiding from herself and him.
Excellent! That's what I want to hear.
Sexy and steamy. I need more than 6!
Oh, I know just the scene for you!
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